Friday, May 18, 2012

Sneak Peak Sampler

Think of it as lunch at Costco or a night out at a wine tasting, only in the literary sense. Here is a small taste of FRACTURED.

             After Lynn is gone, Ben’s smile is full of questions. “What was that all about?”
“She has a crush on you,” I answer.
“Really?”  He thinks I’m lying.
“Really.”
“So about that art book…”
I shrug. “I know. Not very creative.”
“When do I get it back?”
“Never,” I say playfully.
“Never?” 
I watch him meander to the opposite side of my desk where he fingers a glass apple, turning it over and studying it like a Chihuly. I examine him and find myself liking the way his smile pushes the dimples deeper into his cheeks while grooves form along the sides of his eyes.
“Well, I was thinking this weekend would be a good time to get it back.”
Suddenly, I think of Lloyd who will spend the holiday and the weekend alone. I feel a deep sense of shame for even having this conversation with Ben. And I wonder for a moment if I should have invited Lloyd to my parents’ for dinner.
“What if I’m spending it with my husband?”
“Well then, I guess this weekend wouldn’t be a good time after all.” He sets the apple down. “Are you?”

10 comments:

  1. That is some fantastic dialogue and description. This is my favorite line: I examine him and find myself liking the way his smile pushes the dimples deeper into his cheeks while grooves form along the sides of his eyes.

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  2. Hmm... that's kinduv interesting, but I'm not sure if I'm hooked yet, I don't know why these characters are here or what they want.


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    1. Not really meant to be a hook; that's what the last two weeks of the book tour were for. Just a further sneak-peak into the book.

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  3. I like it. It gets you wondering about the various relationships.

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  4. Great piece, Susan. Sounds like flirtation guilt. I'll have to read the book to find out.

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  5. Ooh that is a good tester. I'm definitely intrigued to find out more. :-)

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  6. Great chemistry. You struck a good balance here.

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  7. Love your dialogue! Fantastic piece, Susan. :)

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  8. Dialogue is so telling of how an author writes, and I was so impressed. Can't wait to read more of your work. Thanks for sharing this!

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